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    ::Rambling On My Mind::

    How much would you give, to be...the one?



    D’evil made me do it, stumblin’ through a low fog;
    finding myself alone where two country roads cross.
    Looking for a place of peace inside this mind of mine,
    but time, it flies when scribing these kinda violent rhymes.
    With artistic mastery, capturing our harshest realities,
    for the slightest catharsis, escaping the marsh of banality
    its lonely here in purgatory …so brooding, moody and cold…
    I get lost behind the picket fence, like I’m losin’ my soul
    I’m lost behind the picket fence, y’all I’m losin’ my soul
    in exchange for this emptiness…
    What do I do with the hole?
    I’m feelin’ the blues…It’s dark hued calls’ve got me, y’all…
    Maybe cos’ nowadays I’m not really feelin’ hip-hop at all.
    E’ybody’s a rapper: drops in a bucket of mountainous filth
    so if you’re unique, no matter how wack, your counted as ill.
    So, D’evil told me, “succumb to thou bottomless screams,
    the horrible need to express obsessions and anomalous things
    floating in the moat of consciousness, where sodomy scenes
    fight to dominate needs you harbor of accomplishing dreams.
    Embrace the hallow face of sorrow… script them in serials
    with the hellhounds on you, you should have plenty material.”
    He touched me on my forehead and my skull divided
    and every thought inside it, spilled forth with force behind it.
    Sending my fingers hurdling to earth to fervently speak
    about my brain’s murder scenes, and they nervously weep.
    Flipping phrases acrobatically, magically the pages’ll drip
    Squid-ink black liquids, tracing written havens for sick
    SickSick…Demonic ebonics, moving with perverted inertia
    Fuck their cacophonic harmonics…this verbage will hurt ya
    I said, Fuck they cacophonic harmonics, my words’ll still hurt ya
    I’ll lace all my honest comments…
    with precursory murda
    There’s passion too in the Blue darkness, slick organic lust,
    screaming through your jean seams with an orgasmic hush.
    I’ll wade in those waters of the Mississippi Delta,
    then stroke to open seas, and let the ebb and flow melt the
    frigid tepid flow. Speakers are freed once D’evil’s left their minds
    it’s the river’s Reed where he can stand the test of time
    and yet I find, even with power, happiness is still a lost hope
    after I left the picket fence at them lonely crossroads
    after I left the picket fence at them lonely crossroads
    after I left the picket fence at them roads…Lawd, help me.
















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    this was real dope all the way through, very solid piece

    your word usage is fuckin ill too..

    stay up cousin...

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    brought me to the scene well. in this you balanced scene and summary, which is what makes a good read. i got both sides/points, the vibrant inner character in the speaker, and his surroundings. this is what makes you dope.

    keep on keepin' on.
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    this shit should have got read more..real nice RC, i don't like everything you write..But this is one of those outstanding pieces..had real nice wording..immaculate flow from the way i read it, probably better with the way you spit it (since it's your rap)..anyways..i like D'evil concept..narrating the power of your skills...a fresh flip on such an elaborate concept..

    So, D’evil told me, “succumb to thou bottomless screams,
    the horrible need to express obsessions and anomalous things
    floating in the moat of consciousness, where sodomy scenes
    fight to dominate needs you harbor of accomplishing dreams.
    Embrace the hallow face of sorrow… script them in serials
    with the hellhounds on you, you should have plenty material.”


    thats ill dialogue..

    Flipping phrases acrobatically, magically the pages’ll drip
    Squid-ink black liquids, tracing written havens for sick
    SickSick…Demonic ebonics, moving with perverted inertia
    Fuck their cacophonic harmonics…this verbage will hurt ya
    I said, Fuck they cacophonic harmonics, my words’ll still hurt ya


    thats ill imagery..

    and this is just an ill ass piece..daps man..
    zodiaccurate writer, of fire..there's signs in the words' smoke,
    i puff run-on sentences without severance and burn slow through the work load of stoking my jour-nals..

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    I didnt read it, just reminding u how much of a flake u are
    Don RodrigueZ 79: There are people who rhyme better than you, maybe flow better, word shit better, but I can't name more than 3 writers who write shit realer than you, and that to me is the ultimate compliment
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    ok i read it

    adn that dialogue was mad ill, but i wasnt feeling the entirety of the piece because some of it went over my head
    Don RodrigueZ 79: There are people who rhyme better than you, maybe flow better, word shit better, but I can't name more than 3 writers who write shit realer than you, and that to me is the ultimate compliment
    MURDER YO FACE CREW

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    very ill. I'm new here, but i'm guessing imagery is you trademark? The visual was crazy. reminded me of "The Divine Comedy"

    "Flipping phrases acrobatically, magically the pages’ll drip
    Squid-ink black liquids, tracing written havens for sick
    SickSick…Demonic ebonics, moving with perverted inertia
    Fuck their cacophonic harmonics…this verbage will hurt ya
    I said, Fuck they cacophonic harmonics, my words’ll still hurt ya"....Thesaurus comes in handy sometimes huh? siccness!!!


    "its lonely here in purgatory …so brooding, moody and cold…" I can actually feel it....lol..nice!!!!
    Last edited by eternity; 09-30-2006 at 07:13 PM.

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    Piece was hot. Period. The word choice and flow were exquisite. Indeed, even the repetitions worked to enforce the thoughts of your choice. I always like talkin' to people in my pieces, so the 'y'all' portions were right on time for me. Ill-ass piece, cuzzo. Raise it up

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    got dayum. haven't read a Richard Corey piece since Rapmusic...been a while. shit, i'm likin this piece dude.

    "He touched me on my forehead and my skull divided
    and every thought inside it, spilled forth with force behind it.
    Sending my fingers hurdling to earth to fervently speak
    about my brain’s murder scenes, and they nervously weep.
    Flipping phrases acrobatically, magically the pages’ll drip
    Squid-ink black liquids, tracing written havens for sick
    SickSick…Demonic ebonics, moving with perverted inertia
    Fuck their cacophonic harmonics…this verbage will hurt ya
    I said, Fuck they cacophonic harmonics, my words’ll still hurt ya
    I’ll lace all my honest comments…
    with precursory murda"

    It certainly was murderous. liked this drop from beginning to end...imagery was on-point & ya had me sucked in to the storyline from jump. real nice drop dude. keep dropping.

    END TRANSMISSION.

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    This reminded me of when Ray Charles walked into that country music club and started playing piano! lol

    Wow though. I knew you liked country cos of that Johnny Cash thing you did, but this was more country, if you get me. I'm not a massive fan of country, but I do like Emmylou Harris, Hank Williams Snr, Johnny Cash, and a few others, but yeah, this is why you write and listen to music and write!
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    lol, actually this was my ode to the Blues...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Richard Corey
    lol, actually this was my ode to the Blues...
    lol well they're just the same thing anyways! :/
    **Tha Pastor Reach Yeah**
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    Circa 2000 Richard Corey's Avatar
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    Quote Originally Posted by George Whitefield
    lol well they're just the same thing anyways! :/

    *gasp*

    BLASPHEMER!!!!
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    i really love when RC gets "into" something. it becomes this tapestry of narrative with analogies that couldn't possibly make sense anywhere else.
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    Wash Yo' Back, Nigga!

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    haha cool, definitely knew where you were going with the blues stuff.

    Did RC pull out a spoken word: "Repeat the same three lines, repeat the same three lines, repeat the same three lines" for emphasis haha...

    nice read, u have to update me about stuff, i'll most likely be around more

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    whoa this was dope

    some of my favourite parts:

    So, D’evil told me, “succumb to thou bottomless screams,
    the horrible need to express obsessions and anomalous things
    floating in the moat of consciousness, where sodomy scenes
    fight to dominate needs you harbor of accomplishing dreams.

    this flowed so well and actually meant something

    frigid tepid flow. Speakers are freed once D’evil’s left their minds
    it’s the river’s Reed where he can stand the test of time

    again flowed and just rolled of the tongue


    well basically it all rolled of the toungue and fitted into place nicely


    good job... .. .

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    phat spits bro.
    i aspecially liked this bar:
    He touched me on my forehead and my skull divided
    and every thought inside it, spilled forth with force behind it.


    keep it up

    could you peep my new thread and maybe break it down for me.
    http://www.projectrhyme.com/forums/s...138#post184138

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    cant an wont drag on about it this spit will just say pure ILLNEZZ!!!, keep that shit up for real peace man.....

    some feed back would b nice to yo .... hahaha
    Last edited by depske; 11-07-2006 at 07:06 AM.
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    awsome dude1
    i aint 50 cent im a dollar u a rupee, im the entertainer u aint nothin but a groupie, im the fucken genrale so u best salute me!! cause if i decide im ganna kill u then u ganna have to shoot me!!
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