a little somin somin

[Judge Mental]

http://www.projectrhyme.com/forums/s...=7826#post7826
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a living legend' giving peasants' petty lessons, using theft as weapons
death, don’t let in, breath is air breathed from other dimensions
sentencing victims, lets us sing red rum
place your bets of roulette, with the dead of the scum
personal pressures, get worse before better, the curse of a feather
fly’s on the bird of birth, it hurts when plucked to curve through weather
just like it hurts to be stuck, in a place you should call home
when its not a purpose of luck that it cant be called on the phone
life is life, your in a stall of your own, fight the strife, or die in a zone
where cries roam to show why its not right to ride alone
iv said goodbye and hello, sat aside all my goals
lied to those who use to see all the pride that was shown
fell in love and experienced the hellish fun
devils run around with spirits with a spell or some
get mail in tons, sell for funds, snort rails in dozens
with people buzzin for crack, arms scared from all that
shit it bitter sweet, tempers brief, vent the heat, with a piece
to shoot the streets an do to peeps what I chose you see
do you believe all my foolish greed or are u new to me
grove to beats, smooth it seems, broom the geeks
shroom on weekends and bend la playing doom on pc
pcp needs some tlc with a blt for my belly
the jelly goes with pb and a little ah honey
think that im funny, hit the bank for ya money
smoke the dank till im clumsy still think ya a dummy
so visit thoughts and give a shot to the kids in the lot
the bitch with the dot on her face or the midget that rocks
fuck a mistress with a dildo cock then stuff her face in the pillow slot
until her body mellows, then dump her, no trace of this fellow got
um yea im done lol

[Lucos]

first off, props on leaving feed for others

now to the verse.....
this was ok...you need to work on your flow, making the syllables match up in your bars, and also making the syllables match up in your multis (i cant stress how important that is if you use multis)

eg.
grove to beats, smooth it seems, broom the geeks
shroom on weekends and bend la playing doom on pc

and

personal pressures, get worse before better, the curse of a feather
fly’s on the bird of birth, it hurts when plucked to curve through weather

the first line, multis were all good, it was flowing well, then the end on the bar really let it down because the syllables didnt match, it fucked up the flow for me and ruined the bar....so yeah, work on that....also work on adding some metas/wordplay in your verse aswell as a strong topic.....this was ok though, keep at it homie

[The Prophecy]

Werd. Flow was decent here, mostly in part that the multis were off. You'd start a good pattern, but at the end of the bar, they would disappear. Work on that and your flow should improve a bit. Peace, homie..

[Judge Mental]

lol i wrote this drunk as fuck last night in 2 minutes.. now that i can read what i wrote i think its dope.. i thought i posted this in the cyher fourm haha

[Binary I]

so visit thoughts and give a shot to the kids in the lot
the bitch with the dot on her face or the midget that rocks
fuck a mistress with a dildo cock then stuff her face in the pillow slot
until her body mellows, then dump her, no trace of this fellow got


reminded me of atmosphere...which is good and bad. good first because alot of people feel their vibe, and bad, because no one knows who you are hiding behind this mask. keep writing.

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